I'm not going to lie guys; this stuff isn't my strongest skill.
I know, I know - "Editor-in-Chief". I like to think I was hired for my creative vision, management skills, and my mad hair game (jokes. I have no hair), as opposed to my technical writing prowess. Although I can write - it's just the details that sometimes trip me up when it comes to my own writing.
You have every right to be disappointed by this though - I will do better.
Hi, Joe, longtime Pocket Tactics reader here. I was also a (non-game industry) reporter and editor for about 30 years and now do PR. I write for a living, in other words, and (for better or worse) judge people based on their writing.
Sigh. That was a horrible first post. I have interns in my office who could have done better, at least grammatically. Did you have anyone proof your work before posting? Do you know that Microsoft Word's built-in grammar checker can flag misuse of there/their? It can even catch your dangling present participles.
No one is perfect. My house is glass. I have never written a story or press release that did not have errors. But I triple-check my work and then have others take a look. Did you have others check your piece before posting?
But dripgrind's post here
points to the larger issues: your article tells us nothing about the game, takes the developer's point of view, and generally sounds like a press release. Which leads me to wonder: is this your "creative vision"?
What made Pocket Tactics special was brilliance of its writing. First Owen, then Dave. As a writer, I appreciated and admired their work. I did not expect a new EIC to meet those levels. I did expect the new EIC to meet the basic standards of journalism (grammar, know your audience, know the name of your publication). For your first article, you failed miserably.
Now I'll step down from my soap box and hope for the best.